英文自傳求修改 - 職場

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最近正在修改英文自傳,但有一段總是修不好,請大家幫我看一下

Throughout my college life, I had some working experiences. For instance, I
worked in the department of International Business as a part-time employee,
which instructed me how to reply adequately with guests and treat the
administration works carefully. Besides, when serving as a professor's
assistant, I participate in the research project of the National Science
Council and the publication of teaching assessment. These improved my
data-collecting and result analysis abilities. It also makes me
proactive and responsible.

As to my personality is optimistic and easy-going. My parents...

(後面略)

黃字是我覺得表達不順的地方,感謝


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All Comments

Wallis avatarWallis2013-02-04
aggressive後面的person刪掉
John avatarJohn2013-02-06
My personality就可不是嗎 (The personality of mine)
Damian avatarDamian2013-02-10
因為我後面接My parents....想說不要重複(<-自作聰明)
Barb Cronin avatarBarb Cronin2013-02-11
內容要有重點比較好,可能比英文修改來的更重要。
John avatarJohn2013-02-15
as to my personality
James avatarJames2013-02-16
aggressive這詞不好proactive可能更好
Michael avatarMichael2013-02-18
it makes me an proactive and responsible person 或
Wallis avatarWallis2013-02-19
it makes me proactive and responsible(trustworthy)
Dinah avatarDinah2013-02-20
嗯嗯,比如幫老師作實驗設計,專利、文獻的分析等等。
Kyle avatarKyle2013-02-25
而且應該用made
Dinah avatarDinah2013-02-26
把實際參與的專案,內容用一兩句話寫出來,有發表更好。
Mia avatarMia2013-03-02
These "experience" improved my data-collecting
Thomas avatarThomas2013-03-04
analysis abilities and also made ~~experience要加s
Mia avatarMia2013-03-08
and treated...
Belly avatarBelly2013-03-09
These experiences..., it also這樣不好
Jacob avatarJacob2013-03-11
these多數, it又單數.直接making me proactive and...
Yedda avatarYedda2013-03-12
一行trainee就好了 國科會助理在幹嘛 老闆很清楚