英文自傳求批 - offer

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各位小底小咩妳好
小阿姨今年三二欲求餐飲業的全職或兼職工作
對英文很沒有自信
太弱了都沒用
在此請求小底小美眉批改

感激在先!




: My background is the functioning of government and Law
: which helps raising the living standard of the civil
: public and also advance the efficiency of public administration.
My major is public administration and law which is related to
the function of government and the relations of citizens.
: Besides, I read western literature for example Greek mythology
: and English masterpieces from taking the major classes of English
: literature department and also hit high scores in the exams.
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: In conclusion, combined with law, language and the view of
Therefore,...
: international affairs, I believe that there is an opportunity
: for adding values from being one of your members
: in the corporation.


: Moreover, having the working experience of serving the foreign
: clients also helps me accelerate the understanding of west market
: and realize that the ability of independence and being professional
: are the two bases when it comes to an account manager. As a result,
Moreover, according to the 4 years solid experiences of serving the
international customers, I devote myself to cultivate the ability of
coordinaiton between defferent benefits convey.
: with the advantage of English skills and the enthusiasm of serving
: the customers, I turn to restaurant and develop the know-how of
: offering the food and beverage services. Hope to have your appreciation
: and thanks for your browsing.
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有不通順的地方還請擔心!

已大修,餐飲有多益比較好找,請批,謝謝!
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勇者,在牙醫檯上一個也沒有!


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All Comments

Charlotte avatarCharlotte2013-04-20
餐飲業需要英文嗎 而且第一句就長得要死 這樣菩薩都沒法救
Emma avatarEmma2013-04-24
看到第一句 我覺得就打槍了...
不要為了想秀文法而寫...是要為了想表達而寫...
Iris avatarIris2013-04-25
這...@@...
Joe avatarJoe2013-04-28
btw, 同意樓上 我英文自傳寫的像書信一樣哩~反而
輕鬆簡單吸睛~
Sarah avatarSarah2013-04-28
Addidas這不需要嘛?請批改^^
Lydia avatarLydia2013-05-02
foreverthink所以中規中矩寫學歷科系即可?
Yuri avatarYuri2013-05-06
不知道ㄟ 我看到第一句 我就不想看下去了.....
David avatarDavid2013-05-10
先把事情表達清楚後 再去修文法吧.....
且關代這種東西 不要亂用 要不然很難表達不清
Jake avatarJake2013-05-11
DreamOfPilot是喔怎麼寫像書信?
Emily avatarEmily2013-05-12
說錯 很容易表達不清楚
歪郭人 對於關代這用法都很頭痛了 何況母語不是英文
的人...
Ingrid avatarIngrid2013-05-14
foreverthink...所以就刪掉囉?
Leila avatarLeila2013-05-17
你最前段 是想表你是讀公行畢業的嗎...
Puput avatarPuput2013-05-19
還是行政管理系...
Eden avatarEden2013-05-20
foreverthink那是寫系名就好?我是公行法律雙主
Hedy avatarHedy2013-05-23
阿 哪間阿 文化 世新 中華 是pubilic administration
Susan avatarSusan2013-05-27
台大 台北 淡江 義守 就不是這字眼了
Eden avatarEden2013-05-28
public administration是行政管理 不是公行...
不太一樣..
Hamiltion avatarHamiltion2013-06-02
印象中..
Hedy avatarHedy2013-06-05
您好,最好還是附一下中文喔,大家才好幫您修正。^^
Edith avatarEdith2013-06-07
應該說我的中文自傳跟英文自傳其實寫法有點不同
Aaliyah avatarAaliyah2013-06-07
英文有點像是把自傳和求職信結合的寫法 重點在簡單
快速的讓對方知道我過去的簡歷和特點 而不寫的太
Donna avatarDonna2013-06-11
文鄒鄒 外國人對太文鄒鄒的台灣文章其實會很囧
Quintina avatarQuintina2013-06-12
D大 你說的是CV 不是自傳...
Irma avatarIrma2013-06-16
基本上 外國人履歷 cv跟自傳都是要得....
Ina avatarIna2013-06-17
就像104上面 有你條列式的經歷 自傳是另外的....
Brianna avatarBrianna2013-06-19
嗯嗯 我懂你說的 欸 可能我表達的不太對
Lydia avatarLydia2013-06-22
不過我以前是都有就是了:P
Zanna avatarZanna2013-06-22
Omg...
William avatarWilliam2013-06-25
不知道從何改起or建議 要不要直接套範本?
Valerie avatarValerie2013-06-29
有點不知從何改起 能改的很多 建議去找人幫寫
John avatarJohn2013-07-01
btw 當你用in conclusion 那就該是最後一個paragraph
Jessica avatarJessica2013-07-03
不該在有下面的 moreover
Valerie avatarValerie2013-07-06
餐飲業寫啥英文= =?
Quanna avatarQuanna2013-07-06
餐飲業不需要英文吧 就算有外國客也是看你英文口說
寫這個沒有用
Frederica avatarFrederica2013-07-11
almondchoco那餐飲業應該考什麼證照呢?