可以幫我看看我翻的自我介紹(20點) - 面試

請各位大大幫忙修改一下我的自我介紹(中英文)　面試用的
各位老師(同學)好，很高興能來這裡面試，我的名字叫XXX，目前就讀XX高中，平常的興趣是打籃球、彈吉他還有玩線上遊戲，平常假日我就會邀同學一起到學校打球，這樣不僅能鍛鍊身體，也因此結交了許多知心好友，而我在玩線上遊戲的過程中，學到了許多與人應對和溝通協調的技巧，更重要的是，由於在遊戲裡我是個工會的會長，所以也得到了一些管理人員的經驗，而在我目前的生命中，令我最驕傲的事是我高二時，我們社團受邀到五月天在小巨蛋的演唱會上演出，那時對著台下數萬人彈吉他、唱歌的興奮與感動，我想不僅是現在，在我往後的人生中，這也會是我最珍惜的回憶吧，我的自我介紹到此結束，謝謝各位。
以下是我自己翻的英文　也請各位大大看看
Good morning, my dear Professors. I am very glad to be here for your interview. My name is Simon Chen, studying in HSNU in Taipei. My habit involves playing basketball, playing guitar and playing online games. I usually invite my classmates to have a basketball competition. Because of that, I make lots of true-hearted friends. In the process of playing online game, I learned the skill to communicate with people and what’s the more important, I got some experience of managing people because I was a president of an association. In my life, the thing that made me fell proud was the guitar club I joined invited to perform on the concert which MayDay held in the Taipei Arena. I will never forget the excitement and the touch when playing guitar on the stage. I think it would be my the most treasuring memory, no matter at present or in the future. Ok that’s all, thank for your attention.
感謝各位了