跪求請教一下英文達人,可以幫我糾正一下以下的句子(文法/時態/句型等):? - 工作

Emma avatar
By Emma
at 2017-11-17T01:57

Table of Contents

1.我來自台灣(I come from Taiwan)
2.澳洲打工度假的目的是想體驗不一樣的生活(It s purpose of Australia working holiday is order to experience a different life)
3.我想要找尋長達6個月的工作來支撐我的旅費(I would like look for six months of work that support my travel expenses)
4.我會認真地完成好每一件事情(I will do everything seriously)
5.期望能讓我有面試的機會(Expect to me have a interview opportunity)

All Comments

Ida avatar
By Ida
at 2017-11-22T00:28
就著你的英文程度和習慣英文組織作出最少修改,不等於最好的英文表達,只是做到對英語人(尤其是澳洲英語人)看來不會"不懂"(你的有些原句子對英語人來說是"無法明白"或"誤會"的)
1.我來自台灣(I come from Taiwan) 作為寫信介紹自己OK. 當你到達當地口語說可以是(I am from Taiwan)便較為是英語人會說的方式。
2.澳洲打工度假的目的是想體驗不一樣的生活(It s purpose of Australia working holiday is order to experience a different life)文法句法一開始便錯=上面各人已改正The purpose of....is {in order X不需要} to ... 。中文"目的"你的意義對英語人來卜說是你計劃這行程/工作假期的"原因"。purpose只會用於一些工具性的功能的東西,不會用於人的思想/想法/目標上寫。
{The reason of planning a working holiday in Australia is to experience a different way of life.}
3.我想要找尋長達6個月的工作來支撐我的旅費(I would like look for six months of work that support my travel expenses)句子結構不是英文(看似中文句式配以英字)
{I would like to look for a job that lasts for 6 months to support my travel expenses.}
4.我會認真地完成好每一件事情(I will do everything seriously)
雖然句子寫法沒"錯",但是英語人少用do things{這甚中文},亦不會強調seriously除非是生死存亡或不能有錯的機密等工作才會以這作為"警告",因此你去申請工作卻反過來"推銷"太嚴肅了。
你要多學英語人用甚麼形容詞來表達"認真""有責任感""可靠"等等,回答的人有些把意思變為了中文的"勤力"還可以的。另外英語人甚少吹噓自己"do everything"統稱或包羅一切的表達的,而只會按所談的主題集中自己的意思。例如你想說對"工作"/"勞動"(一般澳洲的"工作"可能都是些"勞動性"的農業工作吧。因此英語人會說:
I work well with animals, vegetation, in farming.
I like to work outdoor.
I am fit to work physically for long hours.
I like to work with other people.
就你的原意(以較為詳細細節表達你的功力而不只是功能)
I am an organized person that work well in multiple tasks.
5.期望能讓我有面試的機會(Expect to me have a interview opportunity)句法全錯。
中文的"面試機會"在英語可以寫成to have an opportunity for an interview. 不會寫interview opportunity因為英文詞組的附屬/從屬性,這樣的X opportunity表示opportunity是屬於X的,而interview本身不是opportunity的附屬品,只是因為中文把英文翻譯變了中文格式,你要明的這因翻譯結構的不同。或者你要改變你中文思維/寫法/講法,
假如用你的語氣"期望"/"要求"對方讓你面試
「請給我一個機會跟你面試」便是英語人的想法=
Please give me an opportunity to have an interview.
I hope to have an opportunity for an interview.
Sierra Rose avatar
By Sierra Rose
at 2017-11-19T06:25
1.我來自台灣(I come from Taiwan)
2.澳洲打工度假的目的是想體驗不一樣的生活((The) purpose of Australia working holiday is (in) order to experience a different life)
3.我想要找尋長達6個月的工作來支撐我的旅費(I (am looking) for six months of work (to) support my travel expenses)
4.我會認真地完成好每一件事情(I will do everything (well with my efforts))
5.期望能讓我有面試的機會((hoping that I can) have (an) interview opportunity)
Thomas avatar
By Thomas
at 2017-11-18T06:29
1.我來自台灣(I come from Taiwan)
2.澳洲打工度假的目的是想體驗不一樣的生活( I expect to experience a different life through Australia working holiday.
3.我想要找尋長達6個月的工作來支撐我的旅費(I would like to work over six months for supporting my travel expenses)
4.我會認真地完成好每一件事情(I will work hard to do everything.)
5.期望能讓我有面試的機會(I hope to have a interview opportunity)

自體脂肪豐頰對臉頰凹陷的改善效果好嗎?歐令奮醫師豐頰費用?

Heather avatar
By Heather
at 2017-11-16T10:11
臉頰凹陷就顯的特別蒼老憔悴,在工作職場上就比較不吃香
自體脂肪豐頰移植對臉頰凹陷的改善效果好嗎?自體� ...

巴黎國際長春診所謝明志醫師的髖關節治療?

Anthony avatar
By Anthony
at 2017-11-16T08:23
我因為長年在工地工作的關係,都有再喝維士比,我才30幾歲而已,去大醫院檢查說我是髖關節缺血性壞死,醫生� ...

急急急髖關節缺血壞死的治療!!?

Zenobia avatar
By Zenobia
at 2017-11-16T06:51
求問!!!!!!!!!!!我因為長年在工地工作的關係,都有再喝維士比,我才30幾歲而已,去大醫院檢查說� ...