Re: 英文自傳求批 - 履歷

Lauren avatar
By Lauren
at 2019-07-08T17:38

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小弟英文沒有很好, 但是覺的應該與人為善 稍微的幫忙修改一下履歷 歡迎給予指教
謝謝

I am a junior student XXXX, majoring in social marketing, in the Department
of Marketing and Tourism Management of Chiayi University. I want to apply for
a long-term internship program for your company, YYYYY, and my available
working days can start on 15th July 2019. For shortly introducing myself and
saving your reviewing time, Here is a list of my skills and work experiences
as following.

Master Skills:
1. MS Office PowerPoint
2. MS Office Word
3. MS Office Excel including VBA Scripting

Language Certificates:
GEPT, Taiwan 725 scores

Prize awarded:
2018 The champion of National Universities of Green Tourism Creative Travel
Planning Competition, TAIWAN. The design concept had received many positive
praise from syndic.

Venture experiences:
1. Student Dormitory Volunteer from 2017/07 - 2018/06; this position often
need to accommodate the quarrel between the dormmates, I solve many conflicts
and always found the best compromise among them.

2. Coordinator of the cherished community from 2018/9 - 2019/3; I lead
community member and propose many plans for execution such as XXX festival
event.

3. Teaching Assistant at Kid Castle from XXXX/XX - XXXX/XX; this is
accounting work; it needs to use the excel to make income and outcome sheets
to ensure all expenditures are correct. Through this position, I learned many
experiences from the fixed a lot of general chaos in bookkeeping to help the
billing system to complete.

4.Social Network Relationship Podcast from XXXX/XX - XXXX/XX; I am a
copywriter in charge of advertising proposal including the product
introduction, adjusting the photo of the product, and publishing it into the
social networks like Instagram, Facebook, and Youtube.

5. Foxconn 2005 high school student internship program. My primary work is to
execute the promotion plan of Asia Pacific Telecom to provide the customer
with lower telecom charges and help them to understand the benefit compared
to another Telecom company.

Finally, I kindly asked the honor reviewer to give me a chance to apply
for this long-term internship, and I will show my best performance
to reach your expectations.


※ 引述《sz06060817 (rose)》之銘言:
: My name is , I am studying in the third year of Chiayi University - Department
: of Marketing and Tourism Management. I am a marketer who is very interested i
: n social marketing.
: Working days: Summer vacations can be practiced every day. After semester begi
: ns, the internship days are Monday, Tuesday, and Thursday. I can cooperate wit
: h a long-term internship.
: Study experience: I often need to make a ppt about the course, so I am familia
: r with using office and ppt.
: Activity experience:
: Chiayi University Xinmin student dormitory Volunteer (201707-201806) - I often
: n
: eed to solve all kinds of things in the accommodation, so I cultivate the abil
: ity to respond to the crisis.
: Coordinator of the cherished community (201809-201903): I am responsible for t
: he
: planning and execution of the event.
: Teaching Assistant of Kid Castle: Because the work requires excel to record th
: e income and expenditure, I learned to use it and the ability to solve unexpec
: ted situations.
: Acting as a public relations officer: experience in writing and writing a copy
: . I have an idea on planning a copy.
: I often write about urcosme's product experience. I will publish a product in
: ig and get 154 people by love. My ig is .
: Foxconn 94 students internship program.
: Help promote Asia Pacific Telecom and computers.
: Winning experience:
: The 2018 national colleges and universities green tourism creative travel plan
: ning competition is preferred. The design concept attracts consumers' journeys
: .
: License Expertise: The score is 725 points. I use tutoring and listening to En
: glish broadcasts to increase my English ability.
: I hope that your company will give me this opportunity, I will cherish this in
: ternship. I will not disappoint your company's expectations.
: 可以請大家幫我看看,並給予我建議嗎?謝謝

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Odelette avatar
By Odelette
at 2019-07-10T05:13
覺得
稍微地
Poppy avatar
By Poppy
at 2019-07-14T16:16
英文不太有這種格式
Skylar DavisLinda avatar
By Skylar DavisLinda
at 2019-07-18T07:31
4.Social Network Relationship 的第三行publish+ing?
Gilbert avatar
By Gilbert
at 2019-07-19T08:24
give me a chance face-to-face 這句怎麼感覺有點怪...
Tracy avatar
By Tracy
at 2019-07-23T09:06
had attracted juror and give 這句的主詞不對惹??
Caitlin avatar
By Caitlin
at 2019-07-25T17:28
很好啊,就是缺你這種熱心的人,我沒惡意喔~只是提出而已
Agnes avatar
By Agnes
at 2019-07-28T01:15
had attracted juror and give 改成who gave 比較好?
Iris avatar
By Iris
at 2019-07-30T17:03
原原po的英文是真的要完全重寫的地步,要給建議很難啊
,文法、語法都錯太多了,不是不給建議,而是希望他拿
出稍有程度的版本再來討論
Una avatar
By Una
at 2019-08-03T15:31
我覺得你扯遠了,我在美商工作,也從來不敢說自己英文
多好,我們公司一堆ABC跟國外名校留學回來的,英文都
比我好個好幾倍,但這不是重點,重點是要跟板友請益,
Christine avatar
By Christine
at 2019-08-06T13:51
真的不要拿錯誤百出的版本,好歹用一下文法糾正網站或
是找範例套,這應該不難
Elizabeth avatar
By Elizabeth
at 2019-08-07T21:11
舉例好了,假設今天有一個人在網路上問數學題,結果他
連四則運算都有問題,你會從加減乘除開始指導起,還是
請他先去了解基本觀念?
Hamiltion avatar
By Hamiltion
at 2019-08-12T05:27
就事論事看來對你是一件很難的事情,居然肉搜我XD
Dinah avatar
By Dinah
at 2019-08-16T03:15
評論事情可以就事論事, 但是要提到小學四則運算 您扯遠了
Caitlin avatar
By Caitlin
at 2019-08-18T16:01
給人一個機會 不會少一塊肉 成不成材再說背
Bethany avatar
By Bethany
at 2019-08-20T08:35
你扯的我家世不覺得很誇張嗎?
Una avatar
By Una
at 2019-08-20T19:36
我不管他是什麼學歷,他的那篇自傳就是錯誤百出,需要
完全重寫,連修改的餘地都沒有,這是事實。
Faithe avatar
By Faithe
at 2019-08-23T20:04
如果您的文 不能引用 麻煩下次發文前 先放上提示 我會遵守
Queena avatar
By Queena
at 2019-08-25T12:50
我幫過不少朋友修改英文自傳和英文作文,這評論是根據
經驗說的,不關我家世的事。
Selena avatar
By Selena
at 2019-08-29T21:14
你就承認你為了辯論而肉搜我吧
Christine avatar
By Christine
at 2019-08-31T11:28
先提小學四則運算的是您啊 我只是說我的認知 我又不知道您是
Edwina avatar
By Edwina
at 2019-09-05T03:00
他的英文自傳在我眼裡確實跟四則運算不熟差不多等級。
文法錯的太多了,語法也完全是中文邏輯
Lydia avatar
By Lydia
at 2019-09-05T20:03
calm down 呵呵 下班啦 與人為善 與人為善
Donna avatar
By Donna
at 2019-09-06T18:32
嗯,共勉之
Frederic avatar
By Frederic
at 2019-09-10T22:23
引用一下 名言 I'm trash! Toy4 還蠻好看的
Skylar DavisLinda avatar
By Skylar DavisLinda
at 2019-09-13T14:33
呵呵 離題的部份砍掉 多給人家一些機會 有時後會挖到寶
Thomas avatar
By Thomas
at 2019-09-15T19:39
呵呵,一把年紀了還跟個小學生一樣肉搜為了辯論
Daph Bay avatar
By Daph Bay
at 2019-09-19T06:10
覺「得」 你的中文....
James avatar
By James
at 2019-09-21T23:31
看來你英文不好 中文也不好 糾正你也沒發現= =
Doris avatar
By Doris
at 2019-09-25T13:39
語言是拿來溝通的,但是寫履歷不是讓你有懂就好的...
Candice avatar
By Candice
at 2019-09-27T21:29
再說了,原文那種英文,你要寫履歷隨便google幾篇範本
都可以想辦法從各篇抽取句型和篇章架構出來修改阿,要改
Harry avatar
By Harry
at 2019-09-29T03:28
真的無從改起,另外原文好像沒說明英文自傳的用途,也
比較難針對用途來寫,簡單來說整篇自己去網路上找資源砍
掉重練再來吧
Tracy avatar
By Tracy
at 2019-10-03T18:40
其實我覺得嘴炮到需要查詢對方,就己經輸了,因為潛意識覺
Susan avatar
By Susan
at 2019-10-05T12:36
得【需要更多東西】才能赢,為何? 因為單憑自己的文字和邏
輯己經沒有贏面.. 旁觀者看來就是如此,心中怎麼阿Q都無妨
Suhail Hany avatar
By Suhail Hany
at 2019-10-09T23:24
英文不好中文也不好嗎? 覺得

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