應屆畢業生英文自傳求批 - 履歷

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各位大大們好,這是小妹第一次求批英文自傳,相信它仍有很大的修改空間,

煩請各位大大們不吝於指教。如果可以,請多用利用站內信給予任何建議

謝謝大家的耐心和願意幫助我的善心

個人學經歷背景: 國立大學財務金融研究所

欲應徵之職務: 儲備幹部

自傳履歷內容:

Extends the deep respect to your industrious work, even you are very busy.
Thanks to glance through my material. And hoped that it can open an
opportunity and the success gate for me.

My name is ooxx, Betty is my English name. I do a Master’s. degree
in finance at National oo University and research on Fixed-Income
security. The topic of my paper is ‘Information uncertainty and corporation
bonds’ liquidity’. I choose to research fixed-income because its low
volatility and it can take stable income. I believe that it will be helpful
not only for my work in the future but my financial planning.

I learned to be independent and helped to take care of my younger brother
when I was a child. It makes me become a thoughtful, reliable, and
down-to-earth person. That’s why I always be the leader in many groups. In
2010, I entered a contest which named World Economic Outlook Essay
Competition with my friends. We had to organize three English papers and an
English article in three hours, then presented them to judges. I used topics
and abstracts of those paper to know the contest and let my teammates connect
to the article. We spent two hours to organize them, and different from other
teams we have more time to do analysis. We not only presented the information
of those material but elaborate our conclusions. Then we got a silver medal.

During the institute, because of classmates’ reliance and professors’
recognition I continue to hold the leader of the class when reelected, even
been picked for assistant of EMBA program to solve all of those students’
problems. Of all assistant, they most favorite me. Whenever they need help,
thy always find me to help deal. I'm not just an assistant, but their
secretary.

I also be administrative assistant in department of finance general office.
Due to strong sense of responsibility, I don’t just finish my job, every
time they have many works to do, I’m always ready to help to relieve their
heavy workload. They tell me that I’m the most proactive assistant. For this
reason I’ve worked here more than one year.

Volleyball’s group mentality is the reason that I'm fanatic about this
sport. Fighting with teammates and sharing the honor to each other are
wonderful things for me. In college, I’ve been an event planner for annually
beach volleyball activity many times. When I had different thinking from
others, I tried to stand in others’ shoes and ask seniors for suggestions in
order to solve the problem and make the following work be carried on
smoothly.

With my great specialized knowledge of finance and highly proactive, I am
confident that I will fit management associate. It's been said, ‘Where there
’s a will, there’s the way!’ I believe that pressure can make me grow up,
so I’m not afraid of meeting challenge. OOO Financial Holdings
gives good opportunity and a series of well-designed training sessions to
make freshmen become an excellent MA. Wish you can give me a chance to prove
it. I am eager to be one of the programmers and I will pay attention to your
firm's development as always, and express my sincerest wish.

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All Comments

Daph Bay avatarDaph Bay2015-04-08
Wow!! I think you are a extraordinary prodigy!!!(>﹏
<)
Liam avatarLiam2015-04-11
建議花點錢請懂英文的朋友或業者大修,文法多處錯誤,
Joseph avatarJoseph2015-04-13
寫作風格也不符合求職自傳的要求。
Odelette avatarOdelette2015-04-14
不過還滿厲害的!!
George avatarGeorge2015-04-15
先找人修正文法錯誤+1
Todd Johnson avatarTodd Johnson2015-04-15
google translate 的嗎
Faithe avatarFaithe2015-04-17
文法要修正是通篇要打掉重練 要加強英文寫作就不是一天了
Steve avatarSteve2015-04-20
先用中文寫履歷
Emma avatarEmma2015-04-24
段落從學位論文-->學術競賽--> 班代經歷-->系辦工讀-->
Charlotte avatarCharlotte2015-04-25
-->願為公司效力,鋪陳非常不順。
Connor avatarConnor2015-04-28
系辦工讀--> 運動賽事-->願為公司效力。
Tracy avatarTracy2015-04-30
建議可以學術表現自成一段,相關工作經歷一段,運動領
導能力則考慮是否刪除。
Ethan avatarEthan2015-04-30
講重要就好,你不是在申請學校,說明你從這些活動學到啥,
足以用在這份工作的
Valerie avatarValerie2015-05-02
講重點....要跳脫所謂自傳範本跟申請學校用的那種自傳思
Catherine avatarCatherine2015-05-05
老闆只要從自傳看到你有什麼能力能夠用在他所欠缺的職位
或幫他賺錢的能力而已
Hazel avatarHazel2015-05-08
英文條列式比較好
Joe avatarJoe2015-05-12
太長了,先寫中文自傳吧。
Erin avatarErin2015-05-13
寫重點,人資英文也不一定很好
Tracy avatarTracy2015-05-17
第一句沒必要。第二段開頭講中英文名字也可以刪掉
Sierra Rose avatarSierra Rose2015-05-19
第一句感覺還不錯,但是後面需要修很大。ESL學生共通
的問題。
Bennie avatarBennie2015-05-22
先不用說別的,妳把自己寫的東西念一遍就大概可以抓
出90%的問題在哪了。沒辦法的話就再說。
Skylar Davis avatarSkylar Davis2015-05-24
還有自傳挑重點寫,最好double-space一頁寫完。履歷
上有的就不用再重複。
Bennie avatarBennie2015-05-28
履歷建議500字以內就好,太長面試官不看的
Gary avatarGary2015-06-01
履歷=>修正為『自傳』
Dora avatarDora2015-06-03
請google英文CV跟自傳,會有一堆參考,另外如果你是要投外商
Genevieve avatarGenevieve2015-06-03
儲幹,建議花錢直接找潤稿者幫你潤飾,你的內容很標準的中文
Edward Lewis avatarEdward Lewis2015-06-08
思考
Agatha avatarAgatha2015-06-10
自傳只要兩句就好
Isabella avatarIsabella2015-06-10
Hi my name iz Ma Yingjeou/Lien Shenwen.
My fother is Ma Herling/Lien zhan.
Carol avatarCarol2015-06-14
沒把握寫很厲害的英文自傳還是就省了吧,看下來很扣分
Callum avatarCallum2015-06-19
不如中文履歷寫精彩點
Noah avatarNoah2015-06-22
你的英文文法讓我懷疑你的碩士學歷是不是買來的